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Starting Over

December 31, 2010

It's the last day of 2010, and as usual I'm starting over. This time I'm starting over with VICTORIA RULES. After more than six weeks of diligent writing, I have produced about FIVE PAGES--the same five pages, over and over. I can't seem to find the way into this story, the hook that will grab a reader's attention and hold it. The only thing that has survived this constant reworking is the first line: I hate Sir John Conroy. So far so good. But how then do I write the scene that shows exactly why Victoria hates this man? So far I've been extremely busy hitting the delete key, dumping one idea that seemed perfect at first and replacing it with another one that may, or may not, work better. It occurs to me that I might have to come up with a different opening. I really, really like that one, but I know it's a mistake to fall in love with my own words--even a wonderful first line.

I hate Sir John Conroy. Now what?


  1. January 11, 2011 7:41 AM MST
    Maybe a flashback, or a backstory as the prologue?
    - Laureen
  2. January 12, 2011 1:05 AM MST
    I LOVE that beginning! I hate him too!!! It already grabs my attention. I don't know if this helps at all, but I read something about him that said if he was angry with Victoria when she was younger he would tie her hands behind her back and make her stand in a dark room. Maybe you could use it? I don't know, it might not be even fully true. Hope it helps anyway.
    - Amanda Taylor
  3. January 14, 2011 5:53 PM MST
    If I began a book with such a statement, I think that I would state the reason for the abhorrence. I think that Victoria had very good reason to hate that evil, scheming man.
    - Britannica
  4. January 24, 2011 9:11 PM MST
    Maybe a dream where Victoria is picturing her everyday life with exgaggerations
    - Katie
  5. February 3, 2011 3:17 PM MST
    I think it's a great start, but maybe not for the first chapter. Instead, use the first chapter to introduce her world, in the style of a prolouge?
    - Katherine

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